Poll: How Does the Writing Feel in the Latest Chapter?
Hey everyone,
I could use a little help. A new editor worked with me on the most recent chapter, and I’d love to hear how the text reads to you. Please ignore the temporary “speaker” tag bugs (already on my fix-list) and focus on grammar, flow, and how natural the dialogue sounds.
How did the writing strike you this time?
If anything specific caught your eye, feel free to leave a comment—your feedback really helps me polish the script. Thanks a lot!
Comments (8)
I’m not sure that I noticed any difference, which is a good thing since I have loved the writing/story. The art and models are also amazing!!
Thank you!
I thought the writing was good, story and dialog. My only criticism would be that there's not enough dialog in the H scene. It would make them more personable and/or intimate. It's usually click, click, click, it's over. I'm not saying some crazy long conversation but during the animations etc. Either dirty talk or romantic depending on the person or situation. Just my two cents lol
Thanks for the suggestion, I will think about it!
The writing’s fine, I actually think it’s super underrated. There are avns out there with trash writing that still get way more attention just bc they lean hard on kink appeal and flashy animation. So if you're trying to level up, those are probably the areas to focus on.
Thank you for your thoughtful feedback! I know the 18+ scenes are probably the weakest part of my VN, and I could easily make more money by focusing on “top-selling” fetishes instead of mostly vanilla. But honestly, I don’t do this just for the money—I actually enjoy treating this as a kind of art project (even if that sounds pretentious). That’s why I prefer to focus on story and writing quality, so I can be proud of what I’m making:)
Looked good in my opinion, but i am biased here because i like your AVN as a whole, not much to critizise from the beginning, maybe it was a little smoother than before…so as always two thumbs up from me…
Great, thank you! Your comments always boost my confidence :)