Liliraune comic page 1-2
Here it's is the first two complete color page!
If you found any error feel free to tell men in the comment.
Comments (13)
Looking great!
Going all in on the anime faces was definitely the right call for this comic. I drink that milkshake, and then keep on slurping to get the last little tasty bits at the bottom of the cup. Page 2 especially, Lucia hanging there like a dead fish is the tits! Here’s what I spotted:
1.1 - 1.2 {There should be a comma or probably a semicolon after their names, and their trades should be written as "Apprentice Blacksmith" or "Blacksmith's Apprentice"} 1.1.2 [Dumb as a Rock / Subtle as a Hammer Blow] 1.2.1 Ms Gorilla => Ms. Gorilla 1.3.3 years => year's 1.4.4 jackpot => mark 2.1.1 ... You stole my idea and are trying to sabotage me! 2.1.2 ... By working together, we can increase our chances of finding the nectar, yes? 2.4.1 this was => this is
Page 1, box 1, “dumb as rock” to either “dumb as a rock” or “dumb as rocks” take your pick
GTFO in big letters both are pretty dumb
I agree with the other comments the colors look very nice keep up the awesome work
The colours look wonderful! I look forward to when more comes in due course :)
Very nice. I like the full design
So it begins!
:stoic Vorlon agreement:
Oh I wasn't expecting Lucia to be a red hair at all, I thought she would be a brunette, since the plain look works well for a cold character
I try aqua blue and she look too much like rei ayanami.
looks nice and clean