[Episode 1.16] Storyboarding week 1
Hey guys! I had a good, solid week building up the storyboard for episode 1.16, “Girls Night Out”.
I already have an outline of the “beats” I want this episode to contain. As explained in a previous report, storyboarding is where the outline gets converted to an actual structure.
I added 94 slides to the 1.16 storyboard this week, including two new mini-scenes that weren’t in the outline but I’m excited about.
(For comparison, the storyboard I created for 1.15 was 178 slides long. Interested parties can check out that storyboard here:
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Linearity
I had an interesting talk this week with Breadloaf about the game. One of the problems we discussed is how linear the experience is so far.
To an extent, this part of the story was always going to be linear. The heroine must infiltrate the club and she must work undercover, meet certain NPCs, etc. (I always compare this part of the story to the first part of Mass Effect, before Shepard becomes a SPECTRE agent and takes command of the Normandy.)
At a certain point in the story, my vision is that the game world will open up more to our heroine. She’ll have a range of quests to choose from, and she’ll have more control over how they play out.
However: I do want to go back over this section and add in some different choices, side quests and skill checks (so replays aren’t so predictable).
I have ideas for what I want to do – but you guys are playing it, and I’d love to have your input on this. What are some things you’d like to change or add to the storyline so far? Message me here or on Discord with your thots.
Okay…that’s all for this week’s report. I’m aiming to finish the storyboard next week: I’ll report back here with my progress.
Have a great weekend, everybody! I am going to take the weekend off to recharge my poor ancient brain. But I’ll be floating around on Discord if anybody wants to talk to me! Female Agent is my favourite subject, so if you have ideas, questions or suggestions, don’t hesitate to slide in my DMs. 🥰
Comments (4)
I'm sure it's been suggested before, but I really need a pregnancy line it'd make me so happy. ;_;
Need a Miranda cosplay option…
First of all I want to reiterate that I'm absolutely in love with this game and I have full confidence in it and in you as a writer. That being said, I would love a bit more choices during interactions with the NPCs in the club. For example, it has been suggested before that an exhibitionist character would have at least an option of agreeing to taking off her panties when the Chinese businessman propositions her. In the same spirit I maintain that a submissive character would have the option to obey the Russian VIPs when they demand she removes her panties. My big suggestion is about the Bangkok ghost tower (forgot the actual name) storyline. I think we should be rewarded for actually making it to the top of the tower with the option to try and seduce Danny into a quickie on the rooftop, or maybe even just a blowjob. I'm not suggesting he should be easy to seduce, but the option to try should exist and there should be a slim chance to succeed, like if you roll a natural 10. I just think it would make this whole excursion a bit more titillating for players rather than a sex-free filer episode that kind of drags on. In all honesty that kind of choice would have to do with a trait that is currently nonexistent in the game which is the player character's dominance/assertiveness. I would suggest that the kink of submissive should be in attributes on a scale between submissiveness and dominance, but that would be a huge suggestion, so I'm a bit reluctant to officially make it :)
I mentioned this a while back, but I don’t think I got an answer for it. But one thing I’d like to see added to the game is more character customization options. For example, she has navel and nipple piercings, if she so chooses, but no genital piercings. Also, the tattoo section doesn’t have options for a tramp stamp on the small of the back. Clothing-wise, I think she should have more short skirt options for casual wear when exploring Bangkok. For as many days as she spends there, she doesn’t have too many ensembles. Also, as a barmaid, I’d like to see more sheer and/or crotchless options for her panties. In addition, would it be possible for her to have multiple attributes at once, in regards to ‘exhibitionist, masochist and submissive’? I usually like to select ‘exhibitionist’, but I’d like to see her be submissive in certain situations, like when clients are trying to convince her to take off her panties. I think that’s all for now. 😂