Merry Christmas! My Gift to you, "A Hero's Rebirth, Ch 06"!
My Christmas gift to all of you is the next chapter of A Hero's Rebirth, I hope you enjoy it! Been working with my editors and I hope you like the results!
A Hero's Rebirth Ch. 06 Link:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/13oBQ0Kg_Muc-LgNE6Rjw8LQ625P8HCe0n9jqRwSisLg/edit?usp=sharing
Comments (8)
First, I absolutely love reading your stories. I've probably read chapters 1 through 5 of A Hero's Rebirth at least 4 times. Keeping that in mind, I have a couple of question/constructive opinions. :) Your style of writing in this story has been up to this point a wonderful balance between progressing the story line and erotic moments. In this chapter however, I felt that the balance shifted more towards the eroticism (example: multiple blowjobs in a single day). Was this intentional? While the story line did progress, I think there were so much more that you could have dove into with his training and interactions with the community. At the end of this chapter, if my timeline is correct, it has been nearly three weeks since the request for household maidens were submitted. At this time, we have only been introduced to three? Understanding that the elven society moves slowly, has Master Thomas's household received additional maidens? If so, could we be introduced to them when Master Thomas returns home? On the topic of maidens, with the addition of additional Battle Matrons, it leaves Master Thomas with only two battle maidens. In an earlier chapter, as the group was traveling through the forest, Battle Maidens took the watch. I would think that with the dangers in the sky and else where, watches would still need to be stood by the maidens, thereby requiring additional battle maidens. Again, I truly do enjoy where the story is going and how you are continuing to develop the world in our minds (finally getting a lesson on the military ranks) and would ask that you continue to share the history and world that your imagination has created. Thank you!
You are correct that this chapter was a bit more focused on the erotic. It was a breath of peace, not so much for Thomas, but for his household. For such a long lived race, that moves at such a slow pace, this has been a blitzing crazy pace for life events. It felt right, needing time to construct the ship, and it felt right the way I had them spend the time. Don't worry, not all the chapters will be as tilted toward eroticism as this one was. On the Household Maidens, yes, they are being slow about it. I believe you should be meeting more when they return from the clouds.
Thanks for another chapter! I'm glad to see things continue to develop with Amura, our new (and hopefully future) allies, Thomas' magic, and everything else. I am already looking forward to more. :) One thing I found a bit strange was how Laliera adapted to, well, everything. I feel like Laliera adapted too quickly, considering how her first interaction with some of Thomas' matrons went and that (if I remember correctly) she has not been to Ealphamir before. Despite that, I also think that Thomas should have done more to help her transition. Though maybe I'm just trying to push my personality into the main character with that last one. Thanks again for continuing to update this story!
Great chapter. Love the way this story is progressing.
Another wonderful chapter!!!
Excellent chapter! Congrats!
Awesome! Many thanks!
Best Christmas present I've gotten today 👌🏾