Too Good To Be True Discussion
Let's talk about Too Good To be True! Everyone should be up to Chapter 28.
So What are your thoughts? What do you like? What do you think could be improved? What are you hoping to see? What are you praying you don't see? Anything confusing?
Remember, everyone is entitled to their own opinion, if someone says they hope they see a kink you don't like, be respectful. You can say you hope it doesn't go there, but DO NOT ATTACK THE OTHER PATRON.
I will be happy to discuss.
Comments (7)
Interesting question for my Harem stories: Do you like regular in-depth sex scenes like I have tried to be doing, or would you prefer more brushed over sex scenes so I have more time for Character development? I will still do sex scenes either way, but the regularity is the question. Is it better to have regular in-depth sex scenes with less character development, or more generalized sex scenes with characters you really know? I mean, I know the ideal is Regular in-depth sex scenes with characters you know well, but its going to take me time to work both of my major harem stories there, so until I feel like we've stabilized, which is better? (Your answers can be different on each story I'm asking this about.)
I think a bit less frequent on Too Good. The newest chapter seemed to be quick discussion on hiring staff, plane orgy, meet the staff/fashion show, sex, sex, cuddle, done. That's not necessarily bad option in and of itself, and would be fine for certain chapters. For example, if this chapter had been the orgy, and both of the sex scenes had been new staff members it would have played fine. The issue I largely had with it is that we've been having a tension on Cindy joining the harem since Ch 15 or 16, and it felt like more of a quick toss-off (735 words from entering the bedroom to post orgasm pictures), rather than a final culmination of a loving relationship. For comparison, new staff member Berkley got 2075 words on her sex scene, and that's not counting the second round of anal, just using the same bedroom-to-pictures metric.
I think ideally I'd like to see a majority of the harem members slowly find their own relationships. The original idea seemed to be for this to be a sexual frustration outlet for them, not necessarily to create a long-term poly relationship. Whittle the cast down a bit to keep it from being too unwieldy. Obviously some of them will be sticking around (Courtney, Mary, and Cindy), but a large number of them could be cycled out as harem members. They're not really getting any screentime anyway, other than as namedrops for the most part.
Well, you are half right. Yes the idea was that the harem could satisfy their sexual frustrations, but in a non-exploitive way that included the long-term relationship. I admit, there's been a lot of name dropping to try and keep characters relevant, and that's more of the problem. I think I need to rewrite the chapters I haven't posted yet and fix that. Like I said in my earlier comment, this was originally just an outlet for sexual frustration, but turning it into a story for others to enjoy, I need to put in some work. And I haven't done that yet. Once I'm done with my current chapter for "A Hero's Rebirth", I'll try and get these issues fixed.
I will confess that this story was the first one I wrote... and wasn't ever intended (originally) to be more than an outlet for sexual frustration during a period when (for medical reasons) I couldn't have real satisfaction. And it just sort of grew. I have a roadmap I'm following and a plan of how I want to reach my end destination, but my sense of realism is making the getting there slow. I know the comments on Literotica have given me some feedback on the latest chapter, and I'm planning to rewrite the next few chapters instead of releasing them as they are. This series is definitely one I feel like I need feedback on. What would you like to see from it?
The first series I read from you. A good one but probably coming to an end. You can't love them all, even if they are all love-able. After the first ten, you can't keep track. The sister was a good addition, but even that will soon wore out. A "bit too easy" on the MC, it lacks a challenge to last much longer IMO.
Yeah, this story is difficult because of what I want to to be and not to be. I want the conflict to be more drama and less physical or financial. So that makes it tough.