Xenosexual [Chapter 1 - AKRASIA]
Well that took a while.
Give it a read! Let me know what you think
or else
Comments (7)
You did great, I loved it, I need more of this
I like the inner dialog, makes Natyss feel relatable imo. How's the 2nd chapter coming along?
Just started it, 2 pages in atm, they're on my Discord, like everything else I do! The inner dialogue was based heavily on Disco Elysium, Natyss always was a bit mad, but having multiple voices in her head was an idea that came after playing that, adds to her character... and her madness
This was great
Thank you!
I like this so much more than your original draft. You spent more time developing the character’s personalities, relationships, and the setting of the world. Looking forward to where it goes from here.
I think so too, watched a LOT of videos on youtube about character arcs and motivations and... generally how to write characters, took a while to get there, but i'm finally happy with this version