December 23, 2019
On Korriban
Togruta jedi got into a difficult situation.
Let me know about mistakes in text.
Uncens version attached.
Comments (5)
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William Richard Bragg · December 23, 2019
Quite interesting
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Terrarkul · December 23, 2019
Since you asked for english feedback: - "You won't be able to resist my massassi for a long time, Jedi!" would be better as "You won't be able to resist my massassi for long, Jedi!" - "He is right, I am losing touch with force." should be "He is right, I am losing touch with the force." The Force is always referred to with a 'the' in front of it in Star Wars. - "And where is my stupid padawan at such a moment?" I would rephrase as "And where is my stupid padawan at a time like this?"
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Flick · December 23, 2019
Ok, thank you)
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JayAury · December 23, 2019
Very dynamic. I love how you drew the Massassi!
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Flick · December 23, 2019
Thanks!