MC meets Anna. 2.0

How about a peek into the conversation between MC and Anna when they first meet?

I would like to thank Michael Hawk and Corona for their time and attention in writing the feedback. I just made the changes. Hope you guys like it.

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MC - I never thought it would be so difficult to find another room in this city. I can't imagine living in that place. I think I better go back to the dorm and beg Deb to let me stay there.

That's my bus!

While running to catch the bus MC comes across a beautiful woman on the street.

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MC hits his head on a pole and falls.

Anna - Hey, are you okay?

When he opened his eyes he got startled to see a blue face very close to his.

MC - Ouch , I think the beat was strong this time. I'm seeing everything blue.

Anna- Blue? Oh, you mean my makeup? You can rest assured, this work of art was made by me. At least that's not a symptom of the knock you just took.

How many fingers can you see?

Mc- Two?

Anna- Sure thing.

Wait, did you say "this time"? Is this the second time you get your head hit today?

MC- It wasn't my fault but... yeah.

Anna- Lucky one.

Come here, I'll give you a hand.

Would you like some water? I was saving this water for myself, but I think you'll put it to good use.

MC- Thanks for the help Miss… viking?

Anna- VIKING, you too!? I am an elf warrior! Why can't anyone see the EARS? Look!

MC- Of cooourse elf warrior. I don't know why I said that.

This explains the face painting, but what about the axe?

Anna- The spears were sold out...

MC- I hate when that happens.

Anna- ha ha ha, If you keep mocking me I'll break you in two, human.

MC - Easy, easy... elf warrior. I take it that's not your real name, am I right?

Anna- Would be cool but no. My name is Anna, and yours?

MC- MC.

Just tell me one thing. What is the reason for the costume? I saw another person just a little while ago dressed as a power ranger. Isn't it too early for halloween?

Anna- This is not a costume, it's a cosplay. And this is not for halloween, you funny boy.

There's a game convention going on nearby, which is where I'm going.

What about you? What brings you here today? Came just to kiss poles? Haha

MC- Look who's the funny one now.

Anna- You started it!

MC- Guilty. Sooo, I'm looking for a room to rent, But I still couldn't find one. Apparently the only places with a vacancy cost an arm and a leg.

Anna- A room… Wait!

There's a room for rent in my building, it became vacant this week, maybe it's still available.

MC- Really? I would like to check it out. Could you give me the address?

Anna- This is the place... Now I think it's better to run because I heard that someone else is interested.

MC- Thank you! I will go there now.

Anna- Good luck human and be careful.. There are many poles in this city. (laughs)

MC- ha ha ha…

Anna- Bye!

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