Spoilers and reviews for v.0.1.7 (P II)
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[ Event involving big turning points for characters:
As you might have noticed by now, my focus during these big events is to let the readers live every moment so they can connect more with the feelings of the character (e.g. Freya).
I don't like to rush it and miss capturing her expressions, her hesitation... and for that, if I have to put ten extra dialogues and renders, so be it.
Thinking about it, that is my style and I don't want to change it.]
Comments (6)
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I was somewhat disappointed with 1.7 - I felt it spent too much time on things like the Freya bar tease scene. While the event contained some great shots, myself as a daz user I know just how heavy interiors+moody lighting+many characters can be, so if I were at the helm I would have spent time elsewhere, like lengthening the Frederick visit or adding another event. Speaking of - I thought that was well done, with a very hot buildup between Freya and Frederick....but then it just ended abruptly! At the time I thought it would be appropriate pacing-wise for Frederick to start fingering or licking but it just ended. Understand character development and all; but it's not like we haven't seen Freya in intimate sharing/ntr situations before; the Travis stuff felt further along. Or, if you were opposed to further sexual escalation, I think the scene still could have benefitted from more talking afterwards. Lastly the D13 jump feels abrupt even with a transition sentence; like an event is missing there or some kind of explanation for why they're visiting Frederick past just the dress. The soundtrack also doesn't play for much of update. Anyway, don't take these criticisms too strong, I've loved most updates of the game, and plan to stay a subscriber for a long time, overall I just felt this was one of the weaker updates.
Thank you for the review. I'd have felt the same with the quick ending. My piece is I try to think what a core character like Freya with her personality acts in different environment. Her corruption should be very logical. Fredrick has just one purpose and that is to make her comfortable with risque clothes and to drive her into exhibitionism. The event of Freya-fredrick is analogous to the small event where MC invited Randolf with Evelyn inside his home. By logic, getting Freya to do more at the very first meeting with a stranger who isn't her bf would be a step too far. I can only say this, now that her inhibitions with Fredrick is dissolved.. I don't have to start from zero again. Freya is more free and the next counter will be very much spicy. Let's come to the bar scene. It has specific purpose as well... Freya like d*rty talking, her corrupted activities where she's the initiator and finally two handsome knights. Ppl who don't like the trope of bbc and pervy characters can finally go for the knights.
Yup, cuz adults often has many complicated feelings and psychology.
Do your thing. You're doing great! =)
I'm a fucking leech who doesn't pay, even so I'm excited to wait for your next update, I really like the story you make and how you make it, good character designs, how you make it seem like they have life, that's why I don't do it like that say, I ask you, don't change