Miko spider corruption p7-8

Try not to push yourself too hard, you don't have to feel like you're obligated on something if you can't necessarily reach it on time as I've said. I still stress on things even though i'm not supposed to because of my psoriasis so I know how it feels.

Are they looking for more little sisters? Just inquiring for... someone else

cool

oh yes brother force transformed in sister spider girl😄

Amazing, only way it could be better is if she was touching the navel to mark her and give her "Brother" a womb tattoo~

Format: Original quote ↴ Modified quote with [notes] ↴ Modified quote without notes. Notes shown in [square brackets] Multiple possible modifications shown in {curly brackets/braces} ――――――――――――――――――― “Let see how you will mock me now.” ↴ “Let’s [“Let’s” is a contraction of “Let us”, which is probably what you intended here] see you will mock me [Removed the “now” here, so it doesn’t feel like the sentence is complete. Because it isn’t]…[While non-standard, using an ellipsis here can let the reader know this sentence connects to the following one.]” ↴ “Let’s see you will mock me …” “When we wear the same face, little sister!” ↴ “...[And the counterpart to the trailing ellipsis from the previous sentence, a leading ellipsis can denote that this sentence is a continuation]When we wear the same face, little sister!” ↴ “...When we wear the same face, little sister!” “What.. Did you call me!?” ↴ “W-what [Rather than an ellipsis, which denote omissions or pauses, a stammer (represented here when repeated letters and hyphens) is probably close to the intended effect of stumbling over words] did you call me!?” ↴ “W-what did you call me!?” “Wha… My voice!? My body!? Are you just turning me into Mikoto!? Gross!!” ↴ “Wha…? [More of a stylistic choice, but I think having a question mark here fits] My voice!? My body!? Are you just turning me into Mikoto!? Gross!!” ↴ “Wha…? My voice!? My body!? Are you just turning me into Mikoto!? Gross!!” “Mikoto you need to undo this!” ↴ “Mikoto, [Comma after addressing] you need to undo this!” ↴ “Mikoto, you need to undo this!” “Huhuhu Why would I want to do that?. You look so much better already sister” ↴ “Huhuhu Why would I want to do that? [Remove period] You {look better already [Proposed changed, “so much” is redundant with “better”] / already look so much better [Closer to original text] / look so much better already [Original. Fine grammatically, but isn’t the “smoothest” of text]}, [Comma before addressing] sister. [Period]” ↴ “Huhuhu Why would I want to do that? You {look better already / already look so much better / look so much better already}, sister.” “Stop calling me your sister! It really creepy!” ↴ “Stop calling me ‘your sister!’ [Might want to add quotation marks to make it clear it’s a quote, not necessary] [Furthermore, punctuation inside quotes is a whole farce, I like them outside, but inside is more common] It’s [Contraction of “it is”, which is probably what you intended (not to be confused with “its”, with is the possessive (Like how “Mikoto’s” is to “Mikoto”))] really creepy!” ↴ “Stop calling me ‘your sister!’ It’s really creepy!” “This is your punishment. So take it like a man Kyo.” ↴ “This is your punishment. So take it like a man, [Comma before addressing] Kyo.” ↴ “This is your punishment. So take it like a man, Kyo.” “Oh, I forgot” ↴ “Oh, I forgot…[Same principle as previously discussed]” ↴ “Oh, I forgot…” “You are not a man anymore.” ↴ “…You aren’t [Contractions tend to be common in speech] a man anymore.” ↴ “...You aren’t a man anymore.” “Look at you just nude and helpless girl” ↴ “Look at you{, / : / ;} [You’ve got choices! I’d suggest just using a comma, but if you’re feeling fancy, you could use a colon. Or a semicolon if you really wanted to for some reason] just a [We’re talking about an instance, so we need an “a”] nude and helpless girl.” ↴ “Look at you{, / : / ;} just a nude and helpless girl.” “It suit you well Kyo.” ↴ “It suits [Simple present because of the pronoun “it”] you well, [Comma before addressing] Kyo.” ↴ “It suits you well, Kyo.” “With this mark we are forever bound together.” ↴ “With this mark, [Add a comma here. The rule of thumb is if the first/last part could be removed without affecting the rest of the sentence, add a comma (Like here!)] we are forever bound together.” ↴ “With this mark, we are forever bound together.” “Mikoto please I..I..” ↴ “Mikoto, [Comma] please I… I… [Some formatting, which by no means is standardised]” ↴ “Mikoto, please I… I…” “No my little spider. You already know who I am.” ↴ “No, [Comma, we are addressing someone] my little spider. You already know who I am.” ↴ “No, my little spider. You already know who I am.”

Some grammar points: let’s see, it’s really creepy, and it suits you