Miko spider corruption p3-4
Ok another draft done.
As always if you have any suggestion or found any grammar mistake feel free to tell me in the comment.
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But fantastic as usual
Thanks and thank you for grammar edited.
Page 1 Panel 1: "Taint of mortality" Panel 2: "Taint" Panel 3: "Embarrass" Panel 4: "I'll teach you how a proper priestess should behave" Panel 5: "...screamed...a cockroach (not the)..."she must really BE out of her mind..." Page 2 Panel 3: "I am no longer THE Mikoto you know." Panel 4: "I am Yame-Hime, Avatar of THE Goddess who rule this mountain. Hmmm...where are your manners, mortal? Kneel, as a goddess stands before you." (eliminate "A" in front of "Avatar" or replace it with "An" or "The") Those are my grammatical thoughts.
Oh awesome stuff! Now to deal with her companion ^^
love you ibenz!
Oh some very lovely work. Did find some grammar problems with the last sentence. You wrote "Kneel, as goddess stand before you." A better way to write that would be "Kneel, as a goddess stands before you."
Not 100% but think the top middle panel should go like this. A divine vessel 'needs' to be pure form any mortal 'taint'
Pure *from*, but otherwise yep
@ibenz009 Will the bodyguard be corrupted too?
Wow she looks amazing already!