Liquid mecury RE sketch p 23-25
Update for liquid mercury. I don't know how long this will get at this point.
As alway if you want to help me with grammar or dialouge feel free to post it in the comment.
Also i must thank you again for continue supporting me. Hope you had a great day.
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Loving this so much! I'll put in my edits as usual :)
Page 1: On the bottom page of the page, there's an 'it hurt!' which should be 'It Hurts!' Then, that final panel: "New directives will be installed into unit personality core. They will take priority without exception." "New directive: We are female"
very enjoyable
very good
Awesome stuff; it's really building towards the finale of the comic now!
I also like Miller, who became a woman at p24, 25. I would like to see boyish hairstyles with such neutrality often. Thanks for showing me a nice picture.
good to see more of it.
I knew where everything was going, but I hoped Miller would be able to overcome a couple of directives, still subordinate to his mistress, but not 100% slave
Coming along good, though since your open to advice on gramma I noticed a few spots that could use some tweaking which I'll list below. page 2 panel 2 (correction) This isn't even an order. It feels like an invasion into my brain, replacing my beliefs in an instant. Page 3 panel 1 (correction) All other emotions such as love and passion will be minimized and redirect toward creator. page 3 panel 3 (correction) Just a void of apathy remains. Is this what being a machine feels like? I should be scared. I should be resisting but I don't seem to care. I couldn't even if I tried. It's unnecessary for my assigned function. page 3 panel 4 (correction) Our speech and body language will be according to the creators design. Now enabling personality "Polite and graceful maid" Page 3 panel 5 (correction) We are allowed to think for ourselves provided it does not conflict with the creators goals or inflict harm onto them. page 3 panel 5 (correction) The creators health and safety must be maintained at all cost. Page 3 panel 6 (correction) The process is slowly molding me into the creators slave. I should resist but that is in direct conflict with the creators wishes. Which is against my programming. Page 3 panel 6 (correction) We are the creators property and every part of our being belongs to them. Page 3 panel 6 (correction) Our appearance is dictated by the Creator. We will accept this form as the creator See’s fit.
And Prima Mercury's finally fully here! Is Amelia gonna be so awestruck by her success that she'll immediately experiment on June? Her TF will be interesting, will it be as long? How much will Mercury be involved and will June be made out of Mercury too? Next few pages are gonna be intriguing. Good work 👏
I kinda want to see Amelia order primary to kill them, only for Prima to recommend that they transform June instead due to her combat proficiency. Amelia loves the idea and initiative and then we get a shorter sequence of Prima converting June as well.
I hope you are too! Good works as always.
Wow, can’t wait to see this coloured in full