Demon lord chapter 2 p23
Taking a bit long too finish this page. I've redraw almost the enitire page lol.
Anyway sorry for that. As alway if you want help fix my grammar or anything else feel free to post it in the comment.
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Dear Ibenz, that was great, thank you
poor, poor demon lord ... will he return to his ruins again? will he see the light in the window? please draw ibenz for him good luck and a happy streak?)))
FIGHT-O!! :arm_chop:
23.1.1 HAHAHAHA {line break here} A demon who still thinks [it's / she's] a priestess wishes to purify the Demon Lord. My my, your antics never fail to amuse (me), Aria. {I was going to suggest an X-cum-Y construction, as it perfectly matches what Demon Lord is saying, but the more I look at it, priestess-cum-demon probably doesn't work as well as I'd like it too...} 23.1.2 whatI => what I 23.3.1 She's => She {"She's" is not necessarily incorrect, but I think "She" sounds better here.} 23.6.1 AWW that hurts => OWW that hurt 23.7.1 Just kidding, {try to fit it on one line} hurt => [injure / damage] {for word variety}
great work !! but this format is not good for a pdf!!!
Is it just me or does the version of the page with the dialogue have a lower resolution?
Not sure. The font is slightly pixelated if you really zoom in close, but otherwise they look like the same image. Did you left click to expand the dialogue version before downloading it?
A lovely chapter, but you've made some typos like, that's hurt, when it should've been, that hurts, and she disappear, when it's, she disappeared, else the page was fine. :)
Truth be told, I actually appreciated the "Gah!" level of shock that the Demon Lord felt in the sketch. It had me fooled for a second.
Aria should just become the new Demon Lord!
Let the battle commence, I find it pretty neat that half of Aria’s face is covered in the purple goo and haunting yellow eyes for a moment before fully consuming her physically. I definitely thought form two was really cool and even intimidating, now that it’s in color I couldn’t possibly miss it.
Looks good a b confusing how to read the chapter
Wonderful; absolutely wonderful stuff!
Let them fight!