Demon lord ch2 p8-9
Another two page done on demom lord comic.
If you've found any mistake or had suggestion feel free to tell me in the comment.
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where is page 6 and 7?
@ibenz009 Also, since you also redraw these pages, mind making one more addition to Aria's demon form, like in this picture? It's by the grey arrow I pointed in. Thanks! https://drive.google.com/file/d/1wkF9nJMmpJn1nklWNu7D4NUYxRPpPNRP/view?usp=sharing
@ibenz009 Page 9: 1 - "The human mind cannot latch onto an ethereal, intangible body, like you have now." Also, try putting a space in "Lose Track" - it will grammatically make more sense. 4 - "Let alone MANAGE to keep your body solid".
@ibenz009 I think there's only a small couple of errors in these pages: Page 8: 1- "Like It will just fade away and be forever lost in A sea of shadow ..." 2- Try this - "It's so hard ... to think ... I'm so tired ..." 4- Gilda should use "okey-dokey" in the last panel (Thanks Benjamin Lawton), as she's like a child in the story. The Demon Lord should say, "Her body is losing shape - she's slowly becoming a spirit."
So how has your story adaptation been going?
It looks so cool that I want to see it in animation.
very cool
lol I thought these exact same words... I approve of her slipping in the seed haha
The visuals look great, I do love how the purples have been blended together and how the swirling shadows are enveloping Aria.
"Her body has started to transform into a spirit." I think works better in the bottom left panel
I noticed this demon seed looks a little different with yellow lining around the eye, was that a conscious decision with reason or am I reading too much into it🤔?
You're reading too much into it. Lol
Great visuals, again the Demon Lord slipping the Demon Seed through Aria’s chest was pretty neat😏. Also Gilda has been delightful in every panel she is in no matter how small.
Wow, it looks fantastic as always! The only error I see is on the 9th page with "lose track" you're just missing a space between them.