Liliraune comic sketch p15-17

I love that epilogue xD

ibenz update days do me like Anna does Lucia here 🥰, albeit without all the adorable complaining and faux protests. Attached are my edits, finally:

I’d love to see a full color version of this comic... great work

I was almost positive that this would end up like the other ones, but god do I love this ending where there are just 2 personas now for her, that’s hilarious. I suppose this is a good ending, despite the fact that those two are kinda stuck together lol

Well. at least they are still sane...so it's a good ending, yes? 555 (lol) I've followed your work for a long time. This is the first time you draw as a love-comedy(?) comic. The character's facial expression is very cute and so much hilarious! 5555 your work looks great of all time ibenz-san!! Thanks for your hard work!! Ｏ(≧∇≦)Ｏ

Please find some spelling and grammer corrections for the panels below. I've also taken a couple of Stargazer's suggestions for the narration. Page 15 Panel 1 This is so humiliating Panel 2 Yes Lucia, become my other half, become one with me!! AHHHHHH Panel 3 No... my body... I'am a monster girl I hate it but it feels so good I managed to stay sane. Though it looks like Anna has been overwhelmed by the pleasure and she's turned out like that Panel 4 Oh you still resisting? Let us continue then! Gah, you still not done!? Panel 5 Of course silly girl After all we have the rest of our life together No, Anna, Please come back! Page 16 Panel 1 Stop where do you think you're touching Nooo Stop Stop Yes let me hear your cute scream AHHHHHHHHHHHH Panel 3 Yawnnnnn What a weird dream Panel 4 Huh, we're still stuck in the flower? You're... back to normal? Panel 5 You don't remember last night? What are you talking about? Think harder. Panel 6 Huh... It's starting to come back to me Panel 7 Oh God... Oh No... Oh Shit... Page 17 Panel 1 By some miracle the flower managed to mess up the transformation process. Both Lucia and Anna, the bitter love rivals, are now stuck together GYAHHHHHHH What did I say, who is that NOOOO and I did it with GYAHH PLEASE KILL MEEEE! You're gonna regret this you overgrown weed... mark my words... After they proved to be harmless the villagers brought the pair back to the village. The girls did manage to give their love interest their delicious nectar but the whole village also received it so it kind of didn't count. After a few months they became a tourist attraction much to their embaressment. Sometimes Anna slips back into her lust addled state at night, pulling Lucia into their flower to the experience the pleasure of the flesh. And while Lucia claims to hate it, her moaning suggests otherwise...

Nice

I can’t wait to see it fully edited and colored :3

Okay I see a couple major grammar and spelling issues... 1) “I managed to stay sane. Looks like Anna are overwhelm by pleasure she turn on like that.” Here’s a better way of putting it... “I managed to stay sane. Looks like Anna was overwhelmed by pleasure, making her turned on like that.” Or “I managed to stay sane. Looks like Anna is overwhelmed by pleasure, making her turned on like that” And the worse case... “After they prove to be harmless the village bring them back to the village. The girls manage to gift they love interest they delicious Nectar. The whole village also receive it so it kinad doesn’t count. After a few months they kinda become tourist attraction much to they embarrassment” Sooooo many things wrong here! Here’s a better way to put it where the tenses work... “After they proved to be harmless, the villagers brought them back to the village. The girls managed to gift him their love interest their delicious nectar... However the whole village also received it so it kinda didn’t count. After a few months they kinda became a tourist attraction, much to their embarrassment” Otherwise I love how it went!~ amazing story~

I found the ending to be hilarious! It's really good! I'll offer some grammer and spelling shortly unless one of the other patrons does so first :)

Amazing work can’t wait to see it in colour.

Well, here we go again; P15 Anna: Yes, becoming my other half, let us be one~ Lucia: I hate this so much, but it feels so good... At least's my mind is still the same, maybe Anna has become overcome by lust, it would explain why she's behaving so differently... Lucia: What?! You're still not done? No... Anna, stay back! P16 Lucia: No stop! Don't move your hands there! Seriously Anna, I'm gonna.... Anna: Go on my little flower, do it... Anna: Huh? We're still stuck in the flower? Lucia: You're.... back to normal? Anna: No, hold on. It's coming back to me... P17 Anna: GYYYAAGGGHHHHH! I'm a woman for god's sake! I'm not some trophy to parade about! Lucia: You're gonna regret this you pile of weed, mark my word Narration: In a strange twist of events, the flower did not complete it's transformation. As a result, while Lucia and Anna retain their memories, the two long rivals are two stuck together. After being proven to be harmless, the villager who found them brought them back to the village. Though both girls managed to give their loves the nectar, the whole town now has a steady supply of it in them. Making their efforts to find it rather pointless After a few months, both girls have now ended up as a tourist attraction. People from far and wide visiting them for more of their nectar. Much to their embarrassment. Even more embrrassing, Anna still slips back into her lust minded state at night, pulling Lucia into their flowery prison the experience the pleasure of the flesh. And while Lucia claims to hate it, her moaning and screaming suggest otherwise...

Impressive and Awesome work!!!!