Volume 1 Rewrite (Pt. 1, 1.00 - 1.09)
It's me. I have worked hard and done the first of many Volume 1 rewrites. Right now, I have done up to 1.09 and that equates to 40,000 words.
Much is the same...and apparently much is different because out of said 40,000, I apparently wrote 10,000? One of my stream-readers claimed that and I don't know if that's true, but here's a link to the page.
Right now I'm just going to keep it on the site like this, in one big page. It'll be public since this isn't exactly a new chapter, and I hope you'll leave any typos or comments on it.
This is only Draft 1...of the Volume 1 rewrite...so this is a work in progress and I'll take off time next month as well. Hopefully it makes a really good opening to The Wandering Inn.
There shouldn't be much surprising, but I did add a new part with Rags and Teriarch from their perspectives. I don't know if I'll keep it, but search for 1.00 T and 1.00 G if you want to find their parts. There's also rewording of dialogue and more description on some scenes like Erin's food poisoning, but I think this was mostly upgrading rather than total rewrites.
https://wanderinginn.com/volume-1-rewrite-pt-1/
There's the link. Also, look at this cool art by jamcubi! That's all from me. Also, check the author's notes--I'm writing The Last Tide (Pt. 2) on Saturday so no stream, but I will post an updated version of Interlude - Singing Ships! Now 15k long. See you then and thanks for supporting the story!
Comments (15)
Found the theme song to erins inn. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UUmNBfx5uHM
Annnnd now I’m listening to the first volume again. Yea buddy!
I just caught up! I really like your updated prose and description of the floodplains. The rags interludes are sooo good. The Teri one was cool to read knowing what i know now but would have made me put the chapter down if i were a brand new reader so I think i am in the camp of no early dragon. This would diminish gregs observation of Klbkch avoiding the dragon matter later on. If The slayer is sweating at Relc absentmindedly asking about potential teri. Kinda seems lame.respectfully. This final thought is just me being super nitpicky but it felt weird that to have Erin just say Goblins and Dragons every five seconds. I dont know what she would do in the situation (you are the author so whaterver you say goes), but it felt clunky to read. But thats all i got. Baby rags is super cute!
I feel the need to join in with the people saying that the Teriarch perspective doesn't quite fit. I think the encounter between Ryoka and Teriarch, and the organic way that the story implies that Teriarch is the dragon that Erin saw when she arrived in the world, was a much better introduction to the character. He's too much later-volume Teriarch in this scene, when we already know him as proud but affable, commanding but paranoid; it'll take all of the tension out of the Ryoka-Teriarch meeting. Overall though I liked the rewrites a lot - I've kind of wanted to go back to the beginning anyway and this is a fun way to do it.
Just as a heads-up, since you're doing a rewrite, it may be important to note that the phrase "peanut gallery" is actually racist.
Discrimination against the poor? Yes. Racist? No.
I'll have to agree with sarvashaktimaan here, Teriarch was a mystery in the beginning and that's how he was written. It's one of the reasons I always looked forward to chapters where he was mentioned and why his meeting with Rags was so revealing. I think it was one of the first chapters where we finally had more than a glimpse of him.
But I do enjoy the rewrite! It's better
I have to say I love the rewritten version, especially since you expanded on certain characters and interactions. The slow-burn opening really works for The Wandering Inn and this rewrite enhances that. I cannot wait to see how the new Volume 1 will look!! I am also interested in how you added Rags and Teriarch to the story, it gives a kind of depth to them that you think "Huh, I didn't know that" in a delighted way.
Well darn, I guess I should have started my reread a week later haha
I appreciate the information in the post on what was changed!
Perfect opportunity to sneak in clever foreshadowing and the like. 🤣
Hey congrats! :D
I personally feel like the early volumes should not have any Teriarch POVs because a big part of his early character is that he is a dragon we cannot fully comprehend.
True but I thought the additions were really engaging!