Lore Writer's Blog - Leviathans
Behemoth-class dragons are dragons that grow to abnormally large sizes and tend to dominate their habitat. But there has been seen in the world of Jrakhon, unnatural creatures of monstrous sizes that are even larger than the Behemoths, albeit very rarely seen, these monstrosities are known as Leviathans.
*The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a _ _ _ _ _ species with _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each _ _ _ _ is controlled by a different _ _ _ _ _ _ so it requires all _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ faction.*
Leviathans are unable to clan or group and only one can be active on the server at one time. Their only purpose in life is to kill on sight, kill on sight, kill on sight and are the only things the mighty Behemoths fear taking on alone.
We hope to reveal the [redacted] concept later this year after the Glacier and Thunder elemental concept reveals. When you see it and the mechanics behind it, it will make your heads explode - it's that awesome.
This is DoD, and we have DRAGONS.
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*The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a *hydra* species with *three heads* that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each *head* is controlled by a different *player* so it requires all *three players* to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the *elemental* faction.*
*The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a *wyvern* species with *three* *heads* that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each *head* is controlled by a different *player* so it requires all *three* *players* to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the *elemental* faction.*
*The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a HYDRA species with THREE HEADS that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each HEAD is controlled by a different PLAYER so it requires all THREE PLAYERS to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the ELEMENTAL faction.*
*The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a *Drake* species with *three* *heads* that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each *head* is controlled by a different *player* so it requires all *three* *players* to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the *Azi Dahaka* faction.*
*The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a HYDRA species with THREE HEADS that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each HEAD is controlled by a different PLAYER so it requires all THREE PLAYERS to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the LEVIATHAN faction.*
Seriously though, that second sentence. If you read it aloud, you'll notice how much help it needs. I don't do this to be mean, I do it because I care, arguably too much. Note the difference: "But there has been seen in the world of Jrahkon, unnatural creatures of monstrous sizes that are even larger than the Behemoths, albeit very rarely seen, these monstrosities are known as Leviathans." (Original) V.S. "Albeit rare, there have been sightings of even larger monsters on Jrahkon. Creatures which dwarf even Behemoths, these beings are known as Leviathans." (Edited)
*The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a *hydra* species with *three heads* that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each *head* is controlled by a different *person* so it requires all *three players* to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the *elemental* faction.*
It's a matter of looking professional. Passive voice is a pain in the butt to edit out, sure. But it helps massively with sentence clarity, the less pv there is the better. The average person won't notice so much, but will find the sentence wordy and unclear. However, a professional will look at this and see an amateur who doesn't know how to revise or edit.
If you say so.
Like this lore am excited, but plz consider an editor 🙏 you've got some obvious grammatical errors...
Who cares xD
Lol if uts a 3 headed dragon hell yeah
*The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a *Hydra* species with *Three* *Heads* that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each *Head* is controlled by a different *Player* so it requires all *Three Players* to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the *Behemoths* faction.*
I got: *The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a Hydra species with three heads that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each head is controlled by a different player so it requires all three players to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the elemental faction*
nice how you suggest other peps copied it from yours, guess the people below also copied it from you the n eh, no way someone else could have had the same idea eh
The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a hydra species with three heads that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each head is controlled by a different player so it requires all three players to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the elemental faction. Leviathans are unable to clan or group and only one can be active on the server at one time. Their only purpose in life is to kill on sight, kill on sight, kill on sight and are the only things the mighty Behemoths fear taking on alone.
Ahhh, you decided it wasn't a drake after reading my post eyy ;)
*The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a dragon species with three heads that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each head is controlled by a different dragon so it requires all three dragons to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the leviathan faction. Leviathans are unable to clan or group and only one can be active on the server at one time. Their only purpose in life is to kill on sight, kill on sight, kill on sight and are the only things the mighty Behemoths fear taking on alone.*
I had the same thought as VIC C, Only with player in there. *The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a *drake* species with *three heads* that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each *head* is controlled by a different *player* so it requires all *three players* to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the *elemental* faction.*
After reading yours and Vic C I don't think "player" would work.
*The first Leviathan creature we will be introducing to Day of Dragons is the [redacted] and it is a *drake* species with *three heads* that each have their own element, one being Fire, one Frost, and one Lightning. Each *head* is controlled by a different *element* so it requires all *three elements* to function. Leviathans are post end game content for the *elemental* faction. Leviathans are unable to clan or group and only one can be active on the server at one time. Their only purpose in life is to kill on sight, kill on sight, kill on sight and are the only things the mighty Behemoths fear taking on alone.*