Preview // TOR Chapters 1-5

5 months later and I'm re-reading your curious story. It amazes me how effortlessly you glide from glam fashion looks, to roughing it with characters in dangerous days. Thanks again for sharing!

Wow, I read it in one breath! Great! I want more! I am immediately hooked to the main characters. Bianca, thank you so much for sharing your "child" with us. You made a brave step! And I am so thankful for it. You have the ability to tell a story, starting almost in the middle and capture the attention of the reader to find out more and more. Please please please chapter 6 to 10?? As a small sequel? 😘😘😘

I am sooooo sorry! I was so excited to read this but I was so busy and I am such a slow reader but I just finished the chapters and it's so good, I can't wait for you to have a house and be settled to you can start thinking about getting this published because I NEED more. I want to know everything about this world, it's so intresting and what will happen with these characters and just... amazing and the years of editing have definitely paid off. English is not my mother tongue so I am afraid I am horrible at putting in words you can understand how much I love this. but yes please please PLEASE get this published or do it yourself because I know this is only 5 chapters but I now need all 3 books.

Loved it! I’m all there for when you’re published. Your characters are so vivid. I cannot wait to read the rest one day!! Thank you so much for sharing.

I loved it so much! Thank you for being brave and sharing your world with us!

I just read it all in one go and now there's no more! What a tease. Captivating from the get go, thanks for sharing it

I need more! I'm hooked already :) And can I put in a cheeky request for an Orphans Revenge lookbook?

This is fantastic and I am hooked. Definitely can't wait to read more!

You put an incredible amount of research into this book! It’s very you, and when I turned the page to Chapter 2, it was like switching from a coarse, rough fabric, to one of your fancy brocades. The fabric element very clearly came to mind there, almost like a curtain being raised on the next chapter. You set it up nicely! I could even see this being performed on stage. The Joycean stream-of-consciousness bits are very effective, and I love how you make use of all of the five senses. The main characters seem to be like yin and yang. They suit each other, and I love Fern’s idiosyncrasies (“hm?”🥰). It’s definitely character-driven, as you say, and I really love all of the back and forth dialogue. I’m sure we are all wondering what happens next in this story. Thank you for giving us this peek into your writing. I loved it!

I L-O-V-E it!

TL;DR: Not to be dramatic, but I would literally die for Fern and Mori. They are precious little babies and I love them already. Long: I can't get this world out of my head. I totally understand why this story has subsumed you. Your Blorbos have infected my brain. The world? Incredible. It is just the perfect amount of greasy sci-fi. I audibly gasped when I realized there was space travel (rich people space travel but still). The world building is top tier. You've painted such a detailed picture of your Yantian. I can see your influences clearly, but this does not feel at all derivative. I LOVE working class characters. An ex-pirate gangster with a heart of gold and dibilitating tattoo habit? Be still my heart! And Mori? What is her deal?! Why is she here?! Who is Katsu? I need to know!! And Fern and Mori together???? I mean, what a great team and what if it's love!?! 🫣 👉👈 And don't get me started on the captain. He's on thin fucking ice as far as I'm concerned. I can't wait to see what happens to him. I first read it in one sitting under an hour. I have already reread it. I woke up today thinking about what's going to happen next. Needless to say, I'm hooked. I LOVED it and I can't wait to read the rest. Like literally, I'm going to have a hard time waiting 💚 PS, reading this on mobile Firefox was fun. The formatting was very weird. About a third of the sentences were in a completely different font and size than the rest. PPS, my phone keeps wanting to autocorrect Mori to Morin and I don't know what that's about.

I read the whole thing and loved all of it. The world building was fantastic - near future, dystopic, but so understandably so- and every piece of technology used made total sense as an extrapolation. Fern puts her “dead ceiver” on a charging pad; Lennox has a tablet; radios are a way to hide guns but the city center guards might not even need lead for theirs anymore. Mori asks Fern where all the people went; Fern points up, to the “colonies”. I loved the pacing. We kept moving forward after chapter one, which was pretty brutal as an introduction. I was really surprised that our literal fish out of water’s first year on land wasn’t going to be the focus of the tale. That really kept me intrigued. I was surprised, in a good way, by the introduction of Mori. I had expected Fern to be the character in need of guidance, but to put her in the initial position of rescuer was bold - and the fact that Fern isn’t a criminal princess a year after being tossed over the side of the staunchly no-killing ship was fantastic. No Mary Sues here, just a woman missing her home and trying to make another found family. (And she was found in the South China Sea as a six year old white girl? Fascinating.) Mori, herself, was a character I wanted to know more about. The idea that she’s sacrificing herself for someone; the hint that she hopes or believes her sacrifice is temporary; the “rebels” she’s sort of working with … I am very interested to hear more about THAT. I also can’t wait until the ship comes back; I have the feeling Fern’s old world and her new might clash again. Captain Reade’s brittle code (everyone but him and his is “scum”? yikes, bud, whatever gets you out of bed in the morning) doesn’t seem very tenable. Especially if he needs to keep putting in at ports controlled by groups like the Gate. I sincerely hope you’re able to keep querying agents and that you get some interest. Your worldbuilding reminds me of Tad Williams’ Otherland. Thank you very much for sharing this with us.

I just have to say that I love your "Fake Addressville, NOP3" on the title page.

Page 58 - it's 1 in the morning and I have to stop - but partly because I know I only have 31 more pages. If I had the rest I'd be up all night.

Oh, I can't wait to read it! I have to go to the doctor's office today so I will have some time to kill and it'll be great, I know it already! ❤️

I’m a painfully slow reader, but just finished chapter one and wanted to do what I can to alleviate any nerves and say I think it’s great! I know it can feel really vulnerable to share one’s art, but you’ve got the goods kid;) There is good flow, right amount of world building and set up, and I feel pulled in and intrigued about the world and the characters (I already love Fern❤️) Stoked to read more!

Ooooh I'm so excited to read it! Just finished reading it and I LOVED it. I'm looking forward to the day I can read the rest of the book and the series ❤️

The link worked for me! Can't wait to read this!! Thank you so much for this special treat!!