A Hero's Rebirth Discussion
Let's Talk About A Hero's Rebirth! At this point I think it is fairly safe to assume people have read up to Chapter 5. So What are your thoughts? What do you like? What do you think could be improved? What are you hoping to see? What are you praying you don't see? Anything confusing?
Remember, everyone is entitled to their own opinion, if someone says they hope they see a kink you don't like, be respectful. You can say you hope it doesn't go there, but DO NOT ATTACK THE OTHER PATRON.
I will be happy to discuss.
Comments (22)
Depends on the surrounding situation. While in depth gets the blood racing, there will be times (not that I've felt that yet! LOL) where I guess I'd feel that there would be a scene that came at the expense of story? But honestly, the scenes contain passion, and to me, passion is quite important to this story, its what brings the characters into focus for me.
Interesting question for my Harem stories: Do you like regular in-depth sex scenes like I have tried to be doing, or would you prefer more brushed over sex scenes so I have more time for Character development? I will still do sex scenes either way, but the regularity is the question. Is it better to have regular in-depth sex scenes with less character development, or more generalized sex scenes with characters you really know? I mean, I know the ideal is Regular in-depth sex scenes with characters you know well, but its going to take me time to work both of my major harem stories there, so until I feel like we've stabilized, which is better?
I think the frequency is about right on Hero's. The newest chapter had several, but it was also a long chapter, and there was a lot of plot development in between them that made it feel like the story was moving forward.
I'd set a hard limit on the number of matrons pretty quick, and stay firm on it. The most recent chapter introduced several in quick succession, and it's going to quickly reach the point of the majority of them blending together and becoming forgettable or indistinguishable. (Same problem that Too Good has. I've actually lost count of the number of harem members). I'm guessing based on the end of Ch 5 that the plan is for him to take matrons from each different race, which is going to add several, as well as the new maidens coming in for the new Matrons.
I know large harems can be difficult. It can be a lot of names and if they aren't given enough time and attention it can make them blur together I'd say that's more an issue of "I need to actual give them more character growth and development" as opposed to "There are too many". I'm gonna try and fix that going forward. Because if I develop each character better and you love each character... stories have had a lot more characters than mine and they don't all blend together.
You best series IMO. I like a lot the character and the time you take to describe the new world he's living in, and HUGE sizes of the releases. The adversary will get tougher and smarter and the last release showed that the defeat of the dark elves will jot be a walk in the park. Very good. I wait also to see what havoc the dragon will wreck, or not if the elven smith manages to make a recoilless gun in time... The idea of uniting other elven races is great inasmuch as it allows to vary a lot the encounters and challenges. Kink wise, popping cherries might become boring after the first dozen... Good thing that you introduced oral sex and a hint of anal play. I'd love to see those last two develop, despite the hard constrains of elven physiology. Or maybe the dark elves don't have a sexually that focused on reproduction and it could open a backdoor ;-) And if possible some lesbian play / 3some would be nice.
Yeah, I know that the idea of deflowering is appealing in party to its rarity. So while it going to remain a thing for each new matron, new things need to develop to keep the sex interesting. I hope you like where this goes in the coming chapter.
I wonder if his matrons (especially the ones who don't think highly of themselves) will gain confidence and reveal new magics as well -- I wonder what Amura will become capable of as she gains belief in herself.
Gaining confidence for his matrons should be a thing, but I want to avoid the trope of "Everything was immediately better once I got a dick in my pussy". These things take time, and to not give them the time they deserve would cheapen their growth and development.
I am generally not a fan of the harem genre, but you managed to create a story with a good reason for the harem to exist while getting me hooked in the meantime. I very much enjoy where that part of the story is going (though I am a bit concerned about being able to remember the new battle matrons). I am looking forward to see how things develop with Amura and the non-Wood matrons (I expect that Thomas will ultimately get a matron from each of the elf species). On the topic of kinks, I would be interested in seeing some mild bondage (specifically the bondage of whichever matron Thomas is 'making love' with). Though I am concerned that including it could do more harm than good for the story (because the sex is too short, or because of some other reason. I don't know, I'm not a writer). I am curious to see what new weapons will be created, if any. I can't help but think that between the powerful flashlight-stone and the rifle scope, it should be easy to create something like a laser. Maybe new types of weapons could help with the dragon issue? This is a great story. Keep up the good work!
Good Feedback! I have to agree that bondage would be hot, but I'm not sure how well it fits with the story, and the characters. If it were to happen, it would probably have to be because of a specific matron wanting it, or it culturally making sense for her... So I'm not sure how that will work out, but I will definitely think about it.
The boons are a great addition to the story, also having the gods step in at critical points is something that isn’t often shown in story’s. Maintaining their involvement will be exciting to see.
I'm glad you saw it this way! I know the worry of falling into a "Deus Ex Machina" Trope is hard, but I feel like I had things set up well for it, and I've set up both the knowledge of what can happen and the price that is paid for it pretty well. Do you agree?
I'm interested in seeing how he incorporates magic -- and how it changes because of his unique understanding he brings from earth
So true! But also how his growing understanding it his new world changes his understanding and forces him to continue to grow. And what does that do to magic? And how much does he have time to learn before things come to the critical point?
i'm enjoying the theme that his matrons are essential to his mission. I like what they bring to the table.
I'm glad this point is showing through! Yes, without Thomas, the Wood Elves would be screwed (and then there rest of the elves would follow), but.... without his matrons, Thomas would already have failed.
Love to see smart enemies. Where even as he gets stronger his enemies notice and plan accordingly. Also the growth in the relationships with his partners and how he handles that.
Your first point kills me when it's done wrong. Like either the MC's enemy is a super intelligent badass who's going to grow and develop with the MC... or how did they ever get enough power to be a threat?
I'm glad to hear the feedback! It is kinda fun seeing how he is growing. I think you might have seen a touch of what you are talking about with the fight with the Kanegs, I am enjoying seeing how his power grows and develops, but I do think that keeping his growth "reasonable" is important. How are you liking the Boons?
I'm liking the boons and can't wait to see what the other gods end up giving him. Whether it be abilities, weapons, etc.
In many stories it seems the authors like to keep things “realistic” comparatively. I on the other hand enjoy vastly overpowered hero’s it makes it fun in a way that rarely gets explored. At this point the hero has the backing of the gods. I say expand on that, let his speed and strength increase exponentially. Allow him to be the one man army that leaves destruction beyond comprehension when facing the enemy. He can still gather the different allies and bring the peoples together as part of the hero’s journey. But let the power increase. And when the battle resumes he can destroy the opposition. Just my idea for how the story could go. Anyway it turns out i look forward to each new chapter