A Hero's Rebirth Poll!
As I am nearing 200 pages in Chapter 10, I have realized I have allowed a couple of comments I got color a few things I have done. Sometimes this may be good, sometimes it may be bad. But one of the points, I wanted to put up as a poll here:
Sex scenes! I usually have quite a few in a chapter of A Hero's Rebirth, but I have gotten some feedback that there are too many. I have a couple where I have implied that they happen, but have skipped my usual "in depth" description of the actual spicy bedroom activity. Would that be something you'd be happy to see, more story and less sex, or would you be a little pissed to start getting "fade to black" to skip over spicy, saucy scenes?
Let me know! I can go back and chance the couple of "fade-to-blacks" I have put in, and it won't take me much to replace the implication with a scene, or I can leave them and let it be. There are still sex scenes. So it isn't a universal thing, but I want to know your thoughts!
Throwing answers out there on a scale of 1 to 5 with 1 being "More Sex Scenes!" and 5 being "No sex scenes at all!" With examples of what message I'm going to get from your vote.
Comments (28)
Hi NP, I dunno if it’s been asked recently but just wanted to check on next chapter rough eta if possible? And if Hero world will be part of your next poll?… thanks for the amazing work
Hero World won't be a part of the poll until I finish off one of my other stories. Then there will be a poll for which of my 1 chapter story saplings will get transplanted and become a tree among the others in rotation. As for ETA... I'm HOPING that I'll have it ready for Christmas...
Hey NP, Is the Weilkier who is helping now, was same one who intially raised objection?
I'll have to go back and look, but I'm 99% certain that Weilkier has always been a supporter. She was the one who suggested the Cloud Elves before the Mountain Elves, and helped with the Airship. I'm pretty sure she never was against Thomas.
Question about asking questions NP, if we had story questions and theories we'd like to discuss with you, is it better to post them here or would you prefer those on Discord?
I tried a discussion thread here a while back, and it kinda just sat there. I'd want it IN a discussion thread though, so probably in Discord.
tbh tho with the sex i can skip it i norm do but wat i really want is more TURKKKKKKK she is by far my fav chatecter in the story i need more turk in my life lol
LOL! I'm glad you love our darling baby dragon. She is a fan favorite to be sure. It just didn’t feel right, Truk coming along to the Mountains. She would have been hurt for sure. We'll see if she manages to find her way back to center stage before we head to the Sea Elves. ;)
Me, story> love > sex. As long as your chapters are I think you need 1 bringing in new, 1 deeping connection. And the rest advanced the story. But don't forget to refer to off scene vanilla sex. Else we loose connection with other characters.
What I've currently done is, for example, a couple of matrons purge, they find a time when Thomas is free, tell him they've purged, and he celebrates because he still loves having a harem he's knocking up... jump to he's back from fucking his matrons... The biggest thing I feel I'm losing was actually mentioned in your comment. "Off screen *vanilla* sex" you called it. As I stated in a response to another comment, I like giving every elf her "first time" and giving it proper attention... but you aren't gonna do crazy Kama Sutra bullshit when you are losing your virginity, no matter how many virgins there guy plowing you has deflowered. Its *your* first time. These encounters I'm skipping are times where there elves might be able to let loose and be a little sexy, frisky, freaky... but if all I write is the virgins getting their cherries popped, it's gonna be pretty vanilla. You did address this, if I understood you correctly, with "1 new, and 1 deepening connection". My question would then be: "If I have 3 new, do I need 3 deepening to keep things balanced?" Or is "3 new, 1 deepening" going to feel as satisfying as you want?
and ik i can be an arse hole BUT sometimes i like wen main ppl get hurt and the MC go on a rambage and no not dead but hurt
Oh, absolutely. The Vegeta rage of "THAT'S MY WIFE!!!" Those moments can be amazing. You really get a feel for the man's possessive/protective side when those come out. It can be great.
id like to see more booze and let him have a drink and have him maybe manifest a power to let him bring his buddy to help him and be able to go back to hids home work as he is now
Cool as that is... probably not gonna happen (Having Jacob be able to come visit). The number of reasons that would not be a good idea to actually implement are to many to discuss here. On the booze... I will admit, part of the issue is... I don't drink. I don't touch alcohol. Never have and never will. I have seen it ruin too many lives, and done too much damage, and I've never needed it to have a good time or unwind. But that does leave me rather ignorant when it comes to alcohol. So, making it unavailable (for reasonable reasons, elves have frail constitutions and alcohol poisoning would take them out with a shockingly little amount of alcohol), means (at least for now) I can be ignorant without it showing too much. :) I guess, worst case, I ask my brother-in-law. He's been to rehab multiple times for his alcohol addiction, so he probably knows a fair amount.
Please consider where the majority of your readers come from. This is a very nice story without the spicy but it's what the most of your readers were looking for to begin with
Yeah. That is a bit of what I figured. I started posting this on Literotica. While there are "no sex" stories there, at least like 85% of what's on there is "check out this poorly written sex scene I am neither doing proper setup for, nor am I giving any follow-up/closure for afterward." Kinda know I'm going to have people pissed either way. Trying to gauge how big the groups are.
I’m split. The sex scenes were the main reason I got into this story; but with as many pages as you stated are in this new chapter already, it seems like it’s starting to get overwhelming. Yet at the same time, as another points out, it’s through those scenes that character development happens to the fullest.
In all fairness, Chapter 10 is still smaller than Chapter 9 was. I have yet to have anyone say that they couldn't handle how long a chapter was. I've gotten "smaller chapters more frequently" would be nice, but writing sex scenes doesn't take long, because they just flow. Writing nation politics, domestic politics, wartime strategy, and so on, those can take a LOT longer to write because I have to carefully think through all the long term consequences of what I'm writing. There are no long term consequences of him having sex with a matron doggie-style I stead of missionary.
I do love the spicy scenes, but if you do cut some of them out don't cut out the first time bonding experiences. Those are crucial to the character development. Not sure about anyone else, but I followed the story here from literotica. I am excited to see the rest of what unfolds from the mountain elves and how many wives he adds from there. I don't really see him adding any house matrons, but it would be a pleasant surprise, but I can forsee some of his warrior matron getting pregnant, with him being away from home so often. He really needs to take a couple weeks after he secures the mountain elves to take care of his household. I know he will need time to get resources before seeing the sea elves.
Yeah, I'm definitely not skipping anyone's first time. Taking a virgin for the first time, or if he gets any "second-hand matrons", that should be special. Though, ome complaint I've had from that is "too much vanilla sex", "too boring", "too repetitive"... but come on! These are VIRGINS! What virgin comes to her wedding night with a kama sutra book and says, "I want to lose my virginity in this weird contorted position!" No. Odds are most women lose their virginity in missionary position, because "lay on your back and spread your legs" is simple, easy, and safe. I mean, I'm trying to remember if it is something I wrote for this chapter, or a previous chapter, but I know there's one scene where he kinda folds her in half, knees by shoulders/ears type thing... but even something as simple as that feels a little wild for a first time! And don't worry, he's taking some time before leaving to the sea elves. There's stuff that has to happen first. Honestly, almost 200 pages in... and he hasn't left for the ocean yet.
I hope I’m not in the minority here but I feel like the sex scenes are crucial, with such a large harem the sex scenes feel like they are our only opportunity for individual interactions with Thomas, a chance to show the relationships deepening, It’s one of the reasons Amura is one of my favourites, because of her situation we’ve gotten to see so much of her and Thomas’s building of their relationship.. and honestly it’s something I crave with the other girls as well and sometimes with all the big and major stuff going on in the world sometimes it seems like the sex scenes are our only time to slow down and see these people get to know each other
I love that the scenes do that for you! That makes me very happy to hear.
I mean, spicy is all well and good, but what's sex without love? ( Maybe I'm just being naive)
Oh, you are not at all wrong! Sex without love is just getting your rocks off and you both might as well be sex toys for your partner... Though the elves want the babies that require a partner more than a toy. It is an interesting dynamic with the elves of: The maidens have strong enough maternal instincts to accept about anyone who can provide them with children... but when do they come to love the male giving them children. Submitting sexually is one thing, growing connected emotionally is another.
Sex scenes yes, with the request though of deepening emotional character development, as in, how the characters relationship becomes deeper and more meaningful?
I can understand where you are coming from, and there has been some criticism with the size of the harems in my story leading to less time for each girl. But there has to be balance. If I spend too much time on the emotional connections with each girl, there is less time for plot. I like the idea that all of my stories have more to their plot than just the sex and relationships. I do promise I am trying!
To be honest, I am reading for the story. But having the sex scenes in there can add to it. I really do love your writing so it is about the story for me.But like I said earlier, sex scenes are a part of your writing.
I can appreciate that.