What Happens in the Dark Ch. 05
It's here! Thanks a million to my editors, thegoofyproofyreader and Ms. M. They've done great work and I hope you all enjoy it.
The next chapter of Too Good To Be True is right on it's tail and they have started editing it now. So hopefully we'll be getting that to you soon as well.
The world didn't end because I posted a PDF last time, so I think I'll keep it up. Here you go!
Google Doc Link:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1979Wbx7PHyf-mYdjKC5KtwAAq7NAOs2XBn804oBcxDU/edit?usp=sharing
Comments (5)
wasn't thrilled, but I'd already sucked him this morning, and this was for a second apparently to get him hard. And this was apparently only for a second
I'm surprised we didn't catch that. I'll be sure to update it.
So, bastard, you-” My mom snapped, before jerking as she was shocked She just took a minimum 5ft fall and should be winded. Add a gasp after so to account for it.
I could see that potentially being a valid add. But I didn't feel it a good pacing measure to draw that out too much. She feel 3ish feet, had a padded rack that wouldnt have taken all of the unpleasantness away, would have lessened it, then she fell the rest of the way. A disjointed fall isn't nearly as bad as a straight fall, and everything was padded. So, yeah, not pleasant, but I can either dwell on "oh, she just took a fall I put in as a minor detail" or I can move on.
Excellent!!!